Haibun – Veil & Smoke in response to Colleen’s weekly poetry challenge #37
Excitement mounts as I set out on a holiday to the mountains. Driving along, I marvel at the artistic expertise with which nature paints itself across the varying landscapes. From the vivid golden hue across the horizon to a somber silvery grey, nearing the hills. The slight drizzle drapes itself in a smoky embrace along the valley.
Fog veils the mountains
in a misty silver gown
the clouds kiss the peak
gentle breeze ambles along
to reveal a blushing bride.
I go on a clicking spree to capture the alluring facets of its mesmerizing beauty. My eyes feast on the kaleidoscope of nature’s charisma, while my heart soaks in the tranquil and serene peace of the mountains.
I have used the synonym fog in place of smoke in the tanka.
Haibun is a prosimetric literary form originating in Japan, combining prose and haiku/tanka. The range of haibun is broad and frequently includes autobiography, diary, essay, prose poem, short story and travel journal.
Nice one Radhika
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Thank you Daneel!
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Welcome Radhika
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A new form of poetry for me… Beautiful lines!
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Thank you Shaloo 🙂
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Such beautiful imagery,
I felt like I was almost there.
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So glad to hear that Moushmi. Thanks a lot 😊
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Beautiful lines, Radhika. Lovely imagery.
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Many thanks Amitav!
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Beautiful lines…The way you have described the beauty of the mountains and nature it’s fabulous. .. You’re amazing… ❤ 🙂
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Thanks a ton Shradha 😇💖
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Nice lines, Mam.Numerous comparisons make it very interesting.
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Thanks Aishwarya!
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Welcome Mam 🙂
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Beautifully written…..
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Thank you Madhusudan!
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Beautiful ! You are at best when it is about nature!
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Thanks a lot Megala for the compliment. I always find nature to be very endearing 😊
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“Fog veils the mountains
in a misty silver gown…”
Splendid lines Radhika! Loved the Haibun and the though process behind it 🙂
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You are always so encouraging with your feedback Divya. Thanks a ton dear 🤗💖
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Nice lines
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Thank you Nikki!!
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It’s beautiful Radhika ji
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Thank you Abhay!!
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The wonders of nature so beautifully expressed, Radhika.
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Very nicely penned, loved it.
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Many thanks Jyotirmoy!!
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Relaxing indeed, to read those lines in praise of nature.
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Thank you Karthik 🙂
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I almost got visuals of the scene. It’s just beautiful.! ☺️
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Thanks a lot Bhavika 🙂
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I love to read your Haibun
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Thank you so much 😇💜
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Beautifully done, Radhika.
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Thank you Kim!
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Beautiful lines and an awesome view of mountain picture you uploaded
👍
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Thank you Monika!
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Very nice, radhika.
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Thanks Deepika!
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Loved the analogy to a “blushing bride”. “Smoky embrace” is such a beautiful description. Beautiful haibun, Radhika. ❤
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So glad that you enjoyed reading my work Olga. Gratitude !!🙏
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How did I miss this. Beautifully picturized, I traveled with you on this beautiful journey.
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Thanks dear for the lovely company 😊💜
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Always welcome, Radha ! ❤️
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Excellent! I love how your Tanka shared the bride’s view of the beauty around her. Was she on her honeymoon? Excellent! ❤
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Maybe 😉
Thanks a lot Colleen 😊
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I’m amazed with the flow of words.
Marvelous.
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Thanks dear 😇
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I love the imagery of this. so beautiful 🙂
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Thank you Judy!!
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Loved “drizzle drapes itself in a smoky embrace “, we’ll done:)
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Thank you so much 😊
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Great! Beautifully written.
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Thank you!
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Lovely and breathtaking lines 😊
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Many thanks!!
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Lovely
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Thanks Lorraine!
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