Once a humble abode, in the open expanse
Breathing easy, simple and steady.
With time my evolution progressed
Prosperity defined my makeover
Taking gigantic strides, standing tall,
I have now reached for the skies.
Labelled the pioneer and trendsetter,
All from my clan followed my path,
Now, surrounded and stifled all around
Alas, I once again long for the open expanse!!
Ic: google
radhikasreflection 
Good to read, I have not fully understood though
I am sure it’s superior
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This is my perspective of the the story of a building. Once it was a small dwelling under the open sky. Now the buildings have all reached for the sky that they themselves are feeling suffocated. And they long to be back as the humble abode.
I hope I have conveyed it well!!
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Excellent. Really great.
Thank you for explaining Radhika
I will be following your posts
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Thanks a lot Kurian!
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👍🌹
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Shelter that All makes sense. Gookluck
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Thanks!
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Beautifully penned! Though the skyscrapers look great but nothing like open spaces and a simple house with front garden.
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Thank you Shaloo. Except for a few bunglows we hardly see any independent dwelling in the city landscape. Unfortunately we are getting enveloped amidst a concrete jungle.
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I have never lived in a flat and I am really grateful for having a small but independent house.
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One of the lucky few I guess ☺️☺️
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I am pretty sure that the builds actually want to be ‘a free abode’
Very well written.
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Thank you Moushmi 🙂
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Lovely written
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Thanks Ruchi!!
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Wonderful
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Thanks Susmita!
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It’s a brilliant post that shows open questions on the frailty of human existence and living.
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Thank you Vishal!
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Beautifully written……lovely post…
your post has create a new thought………..
I think you will like it.
छोटे घर में चैन सुकूँ,सच दम बिल्डिंग में घुटता है,
आसमान में रहता एक दिन धरती पर ही गिरता है|
एक समय घर अपना छोटा आसमान के आँचल में,
आज हुए हम विकसित छूते आसमान के आँचल में,
कल तक सूरज,चाँद दिखाई देता घर के आँगन से,
शुद्ध हवा के झोके छूकर जाते घर के आँगन से,
आज तरसते लम्बे होकर चन्दा, सूरज दूर हुए,
शुद्ध हवा बिन दम घुटता है,विकसित मद में चूर हुए,
आसमान को छूती बिल्डिंग,आस-पास में जगह नहीं,
बृक्ष का दुश्मन हम बन बैठे,हरियाली को जगह नहीं,
वापस एक दिन आना होगा,विकसित हैं दम घुटता है,
आसमान में रहता एक दिन धरती पर ही गिरता है|
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Aapki baat hi nirali hai Madhusudan. Chutkiyo mein itni sreshtt Kavita ki rachna kar di👌👌
Bilkul aaj in oonche imaraton ke beech sabka dum ghutha hai.
Tarasta Hai man oos choti si aashiyane ke liye, jaha darwaza kholo to baghiya muskuraye☺️
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Bahut khub….aapke comments ke nichewali do laayeen bhi dil chhuti huyee paar ho gayee…..jise jodne ka prayaas karenge…sukriya apne es kavita ko pasand kiya….
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Swagat Hai aapka 🙂
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You have spoken for the souls of so many dwellings – very well said!
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I am glad to hear that. Thanks a lot Pragalbha!
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You are very welcome.
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Beautiful lines
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Many thanks Balaka!
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Wonderful !!
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Thank you Saurabh!
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Nice way of expressing the need for freshnes- Actually true in every sphere of life, Even though touching the skies, the buildings are crying for want of space around. Well penned Radhika.
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Cities today and dotted with tall buildings. It is suffocating to live amid these concrete structures. Thanks Deepika !
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It’s trend of the time
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It is, though not a good one!
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Maybe
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Times change, trends change but hearts remain the same…yearning for open spaces! We have plenty of both here in California. 🙂
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That’s wonderful. Very few places have been able to keep up the open spaces in tact. Unfortunately in India many such spaces have been gobbled up by tall structures.
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In a way it tells a story of human heart too.
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Absolutely!
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The want of space, the need to breathe free, one that you need to go and enjoy in an expensive resort or a village that is still not under the GPS radar.
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Haha! Yes, true that P!
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! decent way of lifespan of expressing the desire for freshnes- Actually dependable in every vault of heaven of lifespan, Even though affecting the skies, the buildings are crying for desire of infinite around.
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