This time I am attempting a twin Sidlak, bringing out the opposites faces of the sea. Looking forward to your feedback.
#1
Slothful sea
echoes idling waves
ebbing gently on the shore
muted tides entrance the dreamy eyes
reflecting the blue expanse in a gentle harmony!
#2
Enraged sea
swollen with ire
thunderous rumbles lash out
monstrous waves building a crescendo
the grey sea sings a tempestuous opera !
Sidlak poetry (sid/lak) is a structured poetry consisting of 5 lines with 3-5-7-9 syllables AND A COLOR. The last line must be a COLOR that describes the whole poem or the feelings of the writer.
radhikasreflection 
Beautifully described the two states of the Sea.
Bringing it into the fold of a sidlak is an arduous task.
Congrats Radhika
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Shiva
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Thank you so much Shiva 🙏
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Beautifully described the two faces to sea. You have done an excellent job of writing the sidlak. Writing poetry within the predefined structure is still a challenge to me.
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Thank you Megha for the appreciation ❤️. You are an excellent poetess. I am sure you will do a great job, should you take up a challenge like this.
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Thanks Radhika.You are too sweet even then I’m not attempting 😉
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Ok. Respect your decision Megha!
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May be when I get more bold and learn a more from all your different poetry style.
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Will be waiting 👍☺️
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Very beautifully done, Radhika
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Many thanks Nandita 🙂
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The two opposite facets of sea beautifully expressed. I really admire your sidlaks and haikus. Writing within a predefined structure is quite a challenge and you are pretty good at it.
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Overwhelmed reading your comment Shaloo. Thanks so much for the appreciation 😇
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Lovely!
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Thanks Srijan!
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Beautiful 😊 I have not yet tried, but I am thinking 😊, do you take part in Challenge or write what you want to ?
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Thank you Lakshmi. I do take part in a few challenges. But this is not a part of any challenge.
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How many syllables in the fifth line ?
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Last line there is no restriction on syllables. It should have a colour and depict the essence of the poem.
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Thanks 😊
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My pleasure. Hope to read one soon!
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An extremely wonderful sidlak, Radhika!
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Thank you so much Deepika!
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It is amazing how you fit the composition within a specified criteria and brought out the 2 faces of the sea so aptly and beautifully!
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Thanks a lot Pragalbha. I am humbled 🙏
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You are very welcome 🙂
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❤️❤️😍😍😍😍😍😍 Hey woowww!!
This is a fantastic work!! Loved both the sidlaks.. presented a vivid visualisation.. Kudos for taking up this challenging style and delivering it so beautifully..👏👏👏
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Your words have made my day Parth 😇. Thank you so much 😊😊
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You deserve much more!! It was my pleasure!😊
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Thanks again 😇🤗
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Describing two polarities within the restricted framework is quite a task and you have made it seem so simple and effortless. It brings out so beautifully, both the emotional facets of the mighty water body. Well done, Radhika 👍
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Many thanks Deepika for the generous compliment. ❣️
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Heartfelt 💟
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💝🤗
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Beautifully written!
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Thank you Sumith!
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Amazingly expressed both the sides of the sea, I also feel it like both sides of life ma’am.
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Yes, you are right Meenakshi. It applies to life as well. Thanks a lot!!
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Beautiful 👌
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Thanks Shayra!!
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Welcome mam. In between you write really beautiful and so I want to ask are you willing to contribute your work for mag.
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Thanks Shayra. Would be delighted to do so. Please drop me a mail with the details. My email ID is on my home page.
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Sure mam 😊
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I couldn’t find it . Do you mind telling me here mam.
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Just check under contact.
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Okk mam😊
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Penned wonderfully !!
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Thank you jyo!
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Wow both are really good!
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Thank you Dahlia!
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Contrast and comparison two faces of same ocean. Beautifully described.
We all are made up of this contrast sometimes calm sometimes fierce. You brought it so beautifully ⚘
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Just like nature we too have two faces to our personality. Real growth and maturity makes us retain our calm persona amidst challenges! Thanks for sharing your thoughts Meenakshi 😊
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Loved reading it! 💖
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Fabulous, R!
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Thanks Kunal!
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The two different shades of the sea. Nature can sometime be as calm and soothing but other times in a fit of rage swallow lives, break hearts and bridges – just as we humans do.
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Absolutely P!
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Good to know about Sidlak and both the poems are very nice.
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Thank you Jyotirmoy!
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