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The last journey!

In response to Kat’s twittering tale # 81, to write a tale within 280 characters or less on the given picture prompt.

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Nick planned to surprise his old mother whom he hadn’t met for a few years now , as work had kept him busy. He planned to cook his mother, her favorite meal and catch up on all that he had missed.

The deafening sound pierced his thoughts and then there was only darkness.

Lc: 272

54 comments on “The last journey!

  1. DeepikasRamblings
    April 24, 2018

    Well crafted tale, radhika 👌

    Liked by 1 person

  2. rashishree
    April 24, 2018

    गागर में सागर

    Like

  3. facetsandgamuts
    April 24, 2018

    Woah! Tragic nevertheless an astutely crafted tale.

    Liked by 2 people

  4. Kat Myrman
    April 24, 2018

    A cautionary tale to not put off to tomorrow what you can do today. I’m sure there were many lost opportunities over the years…sadly, he didn’t live to regret them.

    Liked by 2 people

  5. Dahlia
    April 24, 2018

    So much said in so few words! Very well done Radhika 🙂

    Liked by 2 people

  6. rashishree
    April 24, 2018

    बहुत खूब

    Liked by 1 person

  7. Malini
    April 24, 2018

    Sometimes world seems so weird and cruel. So we should never postpone good things. Well said Radhika!

    Liked by 1 person

  8. Megala
    April 24, 2018

    Beautiful story in few words !

    Liked by 1 person

  9. swalia
    April 24, 2018

    A tragic reminder of the fragility of life!

    Liked by 1 person

  10. Moushmi Radhanpara
    April 25, 2018

    I always admire how wonderfully you write despite limiting it to very few number of words.

    Liked by 1 person

  11. Infinite Living
    April 25, 2018

    Oh so beautifully done!!

    Liked by 1 person

  12. vishalbheeroo
    April 25, 2018

    The end is so sad but the power of your writing makes the impact through the flow and human emotions penned in a flawless manner making this short fiction so real, Radhika.

    Liked by 1 person

  13. Rupali
    April 25, 2018

    Excellent Radhika.

    Liked by 1 person

  14. jyo
    April 25, 2018

    Wonderfully structured Radhika💯

    Liked by 1 person

  15. Superb thriller with a beautiful message

    Liked by 1 person

  16. Andrei
    April 25, 2018

    Lost connections are one of the saddest stories in someone’s life.
    You write beautifully in all genres, Radhika.
    Well-thought-out writing 👍

    Liked by 1 person

    • radhikasreflection
      April 25, 2018

      Appreciate your positive feedback Andrei. Thank you! How have you been?

      Liked by 1 person

      • Andrei
        April 25, 2018

        You’re most welcome, Radhika.
        I’ve somewhat taken sort of a “personal retreat” lately to sort things out and grow in some areas I need to develop and improve more about myself.
        Reading from friends’ posts here at WP is one of the things I truly miss lately ☺
        Happy to be back 😉

        Liked by 1 person

      • radhikasreflection
        April 26, 2018

        We all need that rejuvenation break at times in life. Glad to see you back Andrei. Have a good day!!

        Like

  17. Sifar
    April 25, 2018

    Tragic! 😪

    Liked by 1 person

  18. Annika Perry
    April 27, 2018

    Yikes! Radhika, this is great and you managed to write so much in just a few characters! You feel for Nick, trying to make up for his absence, alleviate his guilt and then the finality of the last sentence! Excellent writing!

    Liked by 1 person

    • radhikasreflection
      April 27, 2018

      Thank you dear Annika. Fiction is not my genre. Still dabbling with it. Your feedback is so encouraging 😇

      Liked by 1 person

      • Annika Perry
        April 27, 2018

        Dabble away … and that way you don’t put too much pressure on yourself. This was seriously good and I would love to read more of your fiction!

        Liked by 1 person

      • radhikasreflection
        April 27, 2018

        Delighted to hear that Annika. Thanks again ❤️

        Liked by 1 person

  19. thewritewomanblog
    April 28, 2018

    Oh! So many dreams gone up in flames.

    Like

  20. JEN Garrett
    April 29, 2018

    Wow, that flash fiction is amazing! I write picture books, which some people think is like flash fiction. But no, there’s a certain subtle delicious ending that doesn’t exist in children’s books.

    Liked by 1 person

  21. anuragbakhshi
    April 29, 2018

    Awwe, tragic.

    Liked by 1 person

  22. calmkate
    April 29, 2018

    ouch mystery, well written!

    Liked by 1 person

  23. ron877
    May 1, 2018

    This brings to mind a song “In the Living Years” by Mike and the Mechanics. An old song, it will evoke new tears. Your writing brought the song immediately to mind. Good story.

    Liked by 1 person

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